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127 Sarah's hands trembled as she opened the sealed envelope. The letter inside was written in her mother's handwriting—impossible, since her mother had been dead for three years.
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129 "This can't be real," she whispered, but the paper felt solid between her fingers. The ink was fresh, still slightly damp.
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This revelation feels rushed. Consider building more tension before revealing the impossible letter—perhaps show Sarah's mundane day first to heighten the contrast.
Consider replacing "whispered" with a stronger verb. "Breathed" or "gasped" might better convey her shock and disbelief.
Sarah's physical reaction is good, but what about her emotional state? Show us her grief, confusion, or fear to deepen reader connection.